Monday, July 27, 2020
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Thank you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comments.
Positive - something done well
Thoughtful - a sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say
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Tēnā koe Amelia,
ReplyDeleteNgā mihi ki a koe - Great effort
Ngā āhuatanga e rata ana ki awau - Things I enjoyed
1. Your sentence that describes your character's special talent 'Making people faint with his smell', when reading your sentence it creates a clear image of what it looks like which is great for the reader
Ngā āhuatanga hei whakawhanake - Things to develop
1. Have a look at your first sentence where it talks about the character, a suggestion could be, 'Once there was a king named 'King Pong'